I'm writing it in novel form at the moment and there are some key differences between the book and the series. 1) Becky is 18 in the book and 25 in the series, and 2) I have an unlimited budget for set, props, costumes, etc. in the book and no budget for the series. I don't know how far I'll get but hopefully I'll write a few chapters at least. It just feels good to write something again! I worked hard on the opening paragraph so please read it and answer this question with complete honesty: If you opened the book and read this paragraph would you want to keep reading?
On the day Becky Flynn turned eighteen she argued with her mother, got detention, and ate cake. Then she went ghost hunting with her friends, broke her neck, met Death, and went to Hell. Worst. Birthday. Ever. Except for the cake. The cake was delicious.
As long as the first chapter gets further along in the story than her being in Hell (that is, as long as the first chapters aren't just a retelling of this first paragraph), I think it's awesome.
ReplyDeleteThat's a very good point - thank you! I may have to revise it because I want the first chapter to end with Becky coming face to face with Death. So I need to rewirte the first line to accomodate that. Thanks!
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